Meet Shyin Long, aka Ice, from Murder Creek, in this six sentence excerpt:
No doubt about it, the whores on the corner were forming a lynching party.
In two minutes, they’d call in their homicidal gang-banger pimps and her half-Finnish, half-Asian ass would be turned into bullet pulp. Or quite possibly burnt rump roast.
“Hey, uhm, just, waitin’ for a ride and all. Not stayin’,” Shyin Long mumbled, doing her best to sound non-threatening.
The prostitutes, of course, were taking her excuse and distance, as a sign of weakness, filling the air with the stench of doom.
Great.
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29 comments:
Great Six to start with! Sounds like she's in a bit of a spot and I'm wondering what happens next.
Welcome to SSS!!
Great start, makes me really interested to see what happens next!
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Angela S. Stone
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Hahahaha! I don't know why this reads funny to me...but it does. Prostitutes filling the air with doom, lol.
It sounds very interesting! I'd love to read more.
Excellent hook! Love her voice. Hope to read more.
Eek. This doesn't look good for her!
Love the character's voice in this. Great six.
Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday! Great debut. Some really great lines here from burnt rump roast, to doom. Murder Creek sounds like an interesting place!
Wow... I would definitely want to read on and find out what's going on!
interesting premise and great start!
Great six sunday debut! Sounds really intriguing - why is she in so much trouble? Fab six, and welcome!
Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday! Really great way to start! Can't wait to discover what happens next.
Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday! That's a geat combination of wit and threat in your initial six--excellent hook!
Welcome.
The six sure has peaked my interest
Thanks for the good wishes! Excellent hook. Wonder what happens next? Great six!
Welcome to SSS! Great character name and voice.
Uh oh. Sounds like your girl's in trouble. Interesting setup you've got here. Hope she makes it out all right.
Your first sentence is classic! What a way to start with SSS. Welcome, and great six.
Wow ! What a start for SSS - welcome. That first sentence is a grabber - as is the character - wonderful stuff !
Great six! Questions are raised, and the reader wants an answer.
Nicely done. I don't even know the girl but I'm already on her side. Hope she gets out of there okay!
ooh, so intriguing! Lordy, what'll happen to her next?!
Oh wow, I'm so hooked! I need to read more of this!
Great beginning! Welcome to the SSS family!
love your descriptions
Welcome to sss! Interesting snippet can't wait to see where this is going.
Loved the idea that the prostitutes take her excuse 'as a sign of weakeness.' Scary.
Welcome to six sentence sunday! Great start! :D
I really like the distinctive voice here.
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