Sunday, April 24, 2011

My First Six Sentence Sunday!

Meet Shyin Long, aka Ice, from Murder Creek, in this six sentence excerpt:




No doubt about it, the whores on the corner were forming a lynching party.

In two minutes, they’d call in their homicidal gang-banger pimps and her half-Finnish, half-Asian ass would be turned into bullet pulp. Or quite possibly burnt rump roast.

“Hey, uhm, just, waitin’ for a ride and all. Not stayin’,” Shyin Long mumbled, doing her best to sound non-threatening.

The prostitutes, of course, were taking her excuse and distance, as a sign of weakness, filling the air with the stench of doom.

Great.






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29 comments:

Kathleen Grieve said...

Great Six to start with! Sounds like she's in a bit of a spot and I'm wondering what happens next.

Jackie said...

Welcome to SSS!!

Great start, makes me really interested to see what happens next!

xx
Angela S. Stone
http://angelasstone.livejournal.com

Vegetarian Cannibal said...

Hahahaha! I don't know why this reads funny to me...but it does. Prostitutes filling the air with doom, lol.

Jay Di Meo said...

It sounds very interesting! I'd love to read more.

Cate Masters said...

Excellent hook! Love her voice. Hope to read more.

Vivien Jackson said...

Eek. This doesn't look good for her!

Joanne Stewart said...

Love the character's voice in this. Great six.

Taryn Kincaid said...

Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday! Great debut. Some really great lines here from burnt rump roast, to doom. Murder Creek sounds like an interesting place!

KarennaC said...

Wow... I would definitely want to read on and find out what's going on!

Sandra Sookoo said...

interesting premise and great start!

Gayle said...

Great six sunday debut! Sounds really intriguing - why is she in so much trouble? Fab six, and welcome!

Sarah Grimm said...

Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday! Really great way to start! Can't wait to discover what happens next.

Lynne Murray said...

Welcome to Six Sentence Sunday! That's a geat combination of wit and threat in your initial six--excellent hook!

Lindsay said...

Welcome.
The six sure has peaked my interest

Luxie Ryder said...

Thanks for the good wishes! Excellent hook. Wonder what happens next? Great six!

Jean Davis said...

Welcome to SSS! Great character name and voice.

Hailey Edwards said...

Uh oh. Sounds like your girl's in trouble. Interesting setup you've got here. Hope she makes it out all right.

Jenna Jaxon said...

Your first sentence is classic! What a way to start with SSS. Welcome, and great six.

sue said...

Wow ! What a start for SSS - welcome. That first sentence is a grabber - as is the character - wonderful stuff !

Lisa Kumar said...

Great six! Questions are raised, and the reader wants an answer.

diannehartsock said...

Nicely done. I don't even know the girl but I'm already on her side. Hope she gets out of there okay!

J.Rose Allister said...

ooh, so intriguing! Lordy, what'll happen to her next?!

graylinfox said...

Oh wow, I'm so hooked! I need to read more of this!

Roberta Walker said...

Great beginning! Welcome to the SSS family!

Jayel Kaye said...

love your descriptions

laynap said...

Welcome to sss! Interesting snippet can't wait to see where this is going.

Pippa Jay said...

Loved the idea that the prostitutes take her excuse 'as a sign of weakeness.' Scary.

joleenenaylor said...

Welcome to six sentence sunday! Great start! :D

J.A. Beard said...

I really like the distinctive voice here.