Scene: Vic just woke up to a giant ass coming at him, pinning him to his chair.(Taken from the 0.99 novel Murder Creek available at Amazon and Barnes and Noble)
“Ge’…off!” he choked.
The more he fought the guy squishing him, the more pressure the gorilla applied. Vic turned his head to the side—to avoid being smothered in back fat—and came face-to-face with a sneaky piece of shit he’d hoped to never see again.
Gato’s smug smile could only be described as oil-slick, proud of himself for tracking Vic down. There weren’t many people living who knew what The Rattlesnake looked—and in Gato’s case smelled—like, and when Vic got his hands on the bastard, there'd be one less.
“How’s it goin’, ese?” Gato asked, making a great show of dusting off the sleeves of his Armani suit. Vic had one just like it—if he survived this reunion he’d burn it.
22 comments:
yeah burn that suit lol - who knows what’s gotten on it
Great Six, Allure. I like the death by squishing scene!
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Kristin Wolfgang
Great writing. You really know how to create a scene.
lol loved this scene!
Ha ha! About to die by crushing and he thinks about not having the same suit as the slimeball. I hope he does survive!
Love this six, very vivid scene with great pacing
Loved this scene - you had me right into it!
If he survives the reunion! Squishing! Eek!
Love the six
Well written!
Now that's a vivid scene! And what an unpleasant way to go. eek!
Love the last line! Great six!
How wild! I was blinking in surprise. Fun six!
Great scene. I'd burn the suit too.
Back fat! The detail in this was astonishing. And nasty! (But in a good way.)
fantastic six, loved it!
Getting your ass kicked by an ass is rather embarrassing. :)
lol, just can't get the image of a fat arse bearing down on the protagonist out of my head! Great snippet!
The ass is covered in Armani?!? That puts a different complexion on it!
Love the humor he displays at such a serious time!
Excellent. A nicely done six, Allure.
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