Sunday, June 26, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday June 26th

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Scene: Vic just woke up to a giant ass coming at him, pinning him to his chair. Paulo is the huge sumo-wanna be sitting on him, but he is being addressed by the drug lord Gato, who has a "favor" he needs from Vic.(Taken from the 0.99 novel Murder Creek available at Amazon and Barnes and Noble)


“What favor you ask? The favor of not telling your enemies where I found ya, ese, I figure—ya owe me for that, and I’m thinkin’ ya don’t wanna be telling me no about now.”

Gato’s grin practically slithered across his face. “Ain’t that right, Paulo?”

Paulo looked over a mountainous shoulder at him. “I had eight cheeseburgers and three orders of chili cheese fries.”

Vic struggled harder.





16 comments:

kea said...

Smelly Six, Allure.

Happy Sunday,
Kristin Wolfgang

Alix said...

Interesting six. As Kea said, smelly! Thank you.

Gem Sivad said...

Well I definitely got a great visual from this six. Nice work, Allure.

Sam Crescent said...

interesting six in a good way lol

charmainegordon author said...

All I can think of is Burp! So much food. But, Allure, you paint a good picture and that's what writing is all about.

sassyspeaks said...

realistic dialogue and yeah - clogs up the nose too - great writing

Marie Dees said...

Fun six. You have a great voice!

Nichelle Gregory said...

Wow! That guy's gotta have a serious case of heartburn! Intriguing six, Allure! :)t

Zee Monodee said...

Lol! Very nice work!

JoAnne Kenrick said...

Love the dialogue, and...yeah... wouldn't want to be in that position! LOL LOVE IT!

Bree said...

Great dialogue and voice here. :)

Jessica K said...

Oh dear, he probably shouldn't waste his strength struggling. This is a great story.

Xakara said...

Ew, but effectively conveyed. *grin*

~Xakara
A Way To A Dragon's Heart 6SS

Jessica Subject said...

I'm thinking he doesn't want to say no either. Nice six!

Jenna said...

His grin "practically slithered across his face." Wonderful visual. And the recitation of the menu is priceless! Great six!

Lindsay said...

Wouldn't want to even be upwind of the sumo or in the next county for that matter.