Sunday, July 10, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday July 10th

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Scene SETUP: Meet Grey. He's Vic's best friend, and he's just walked in on a very wrinkled Vic, after his visit from Gato and the sumo. Grey has just figured out the super of the building had to be the one to open his mouth about Vic's whereabouts. Vic is listening to Grey storm down the hall. (Taken from the 0.99 novel Murder Creek available at Amazon and Barnes and Noble)


He heard shouting and splintering wood as Grey’s voice boomed down the hall, the sentences broken up with the sound of frying pan against skull. “…ever say a word again…” Bong “…saw your legs off while ya watch…” Bong “Are those…burritos?”

One more thunk preceded the clang of Grey’s weapon dropping to the floor, and seconds later, he reappeared in Vic’s apartment with a burrito in each hand. He held one out to Vic.

“Grey, you shouldn’t get inv-“

“Shut up and eat your burrito.”





21 comments:

Cara Bristol said...

Funny. So very visual.

Sam Crescent said...

Interesting lol

sue said...

yeah just eat your buritto - wonderful as always

JoAnne Kenrick said...

Shut up and eat your burrito! LMAO

Anonymous said...

Ha, love that he stopped beating the guy cos he saw the burritos! Great snippet!

Zee Monodee said...

A frying pan? What a scene!

Pippa Jay said...

That's too funny! :D

Anonymous said...

Excellent - love the burrito bit!

Chrystalla Thoma said...

Hee hee! So funny! Excellent six! :-D

Jessica Knauss said...

Wonderful snippet! This is such a humorous book

Bree said...

lol! Those damn burritos! Great snip!

Trish said...

Cute snippet, somebody in that scene must be seeing stars.

Michele said...

Yeah, THIS-- was fabulous! Killer last line too! Great 6!

Taryn Kincaid said...

Are those burritos!

LOL!

Lauri J Owen said...

LOL! Well, you have to understand men, I guess.

Suzie Quint said...

I love the repeated bongs. I started giggling with the first one.

Unknown said...

OMG! Brilliant! The burrito bit broke the tension of a very gruesome scene. Loved it!

Gem Sivad said...

I think the super should be glad Grey likes burritos. Great visual six and loved the humor.

J. Gunnar Grey said...

Funny!

J.A. Beard said...

Some great humor here.

"Shut up and eat your burrito."

Hehe.

Vivien Jackson said...

Sick and tasty!