Scene SETUP: Meet Grey. He's Vic's best friend, and he's just walked in on a very wrinkled Vic, after his visit from Gato and the sumo. Grey has just figured out the super of the building had to be the one to open his mouth about Vic's whereabouts. Vic is listening to Grey storm down the hall. (Taken from the 0.99 novel Murder Creek available at Amazon and Barnes and Noble)
He heard shouting and splintering wood as Grey’s voice boomed down the hall, the sentences broken up with the sound of frying pan against skull. “…ever say a word again…” Bong “…saw your legs off while ya watch…” Bong “Are those…burritos?”
One more thunk preceded the clang of Grey’s weapon dropping to the floor, and seconds later, he reappeared in Vic’s apartment with a burrito in each hand. He held one out to Vic.
“Grey, you shouldn’t get inv-“
“Shut up and eat your burrito.”
21 comments:
Funny. So very visual.
Interesting lol
yeah just eat your buritto - wonderful as always
Shut up and eat your burrito! LMAO
Ha, love that he stopped beating the guy cos he saw the burritos! Great snippet!
A frying pan? What a scene!
That's too funny! :D
Excellent - love the burrito bit!
Hee hee! So funny! Excellent six! :-D
Wonderful snippet! This is such a humorous book
lol! Those damn burritos! Great snip!
Cute snippet, somebody in that scene must be seeing stars.
Yeah, THIS-- was fabulous! Killer last line too! Great 6!
Are those burritos!
LOL!
LOL! Well, you have to understand men, I guess.
I love the repeated bongs. I started giggling with the first one.
OMG! Brilliant! The burrito bit broke the tension of a very gruesome scene. Loved it!
I think the super should be glad Grey likes burritos. Great visual six and loved the humor.
Funny!
Some great humor here.
"Shut up and eat your burrito."
Hehe.
Sick and tasty!
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